Jake

Short and Sweet. WALT use descriptive language to paint a picture.

The plane crashed into the sea.

the plane was about to land when suddenly all of the systems shut down. They where aiming for a frozen lake. The pilot was trying fly up but the systems where shut down suddenly ** crash ** they where in the water. l uckily a rescue helicopter was flying over them and they where saved.

You just love a happy ending Jake! I can visualise the plane going down. I have highlighted some surface features for you to edit. Mrs W.

Were or where? A sentence for each please.